So halfway through revising the script, I'd think it would be better to turn the whole idea into a series rather than one huge flash. The scale of the Mass Effect universe is too big to fit in one sitting, even if one focuses on the main storyline. I'm in the process of re-doing the script, adding depth and more "flesh" if you will.
Below is the whole, finished script of Episode 1. I'd figure that it would wrap up the events of Eden Prime and the first visit to the Citadel. Feedback is appreciated, and thank you for reading!
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FADE IN:
TRANSMISSION SIGNAL FROM EDEN PRIME
Through a video/camera filter, a puzzled SARGE is making sure the camera is set up. Behind him are STEVE, BILL, and a TANKMAN firing behind waist-high rocks, while crouching for cover, at an off-screen threat returning fire with lasers.
SARGE
Is this thing on? I don't see a blinking light.
TANKMAN
They're coming out of nowhere!
STEVE
Heh, you said "coming."
SARGE
We are under attack. We need reinforcements to cover this much swamp-ass.
BILL suddenly smiles with joy and looks towards SARGE. He stands up, even though the exchange of gunfire continues. He waves at the camera.
BILL
Hey guys, I just heard I'm going to be a dad!
A laser hits BILL in the head and BILL dies. STEVE looks at BILL's dead body and drops his gun in distress. In panic, STEVE stands up and starts running in circles with his arms flailing in the air. STEVE's faint, girly screams can be heard.
SARGE
I hope someone gets here fast...
SARGE looks down and picks up a DVD.
SARGE
Ooh, Titanic! Aww... it's only the first part.
TANKMAN
We still have DVDs?
A gradual zoom-out from STEVE's panic attack shows the transmission being played from the SSV Normandy's comm room, with COMMANDER SHEPARD's silhouette watching.
FADE OUT:
[SOMETIME LATER]
CUT IN:
THE BEACON HAS BEEN SECURED
SHEPARD is on his earset, communicating with ANDERSON. In the background, SARGE and STEVE are taking turns poking a dead Geth with their rifles. Behind them is a Prothean beacon, with a green laser being emitted from the tip.
ANDERSON (OFFSCREEN)
Good job taking care of the Geth SHEPARD. I'm assuming the beacon is still intact?
A dialogue tree pops up. SHEPARD is seen through expression pondering between the neutral choice "Affirmative" and the Renegade option "No thanks to these incompetent assholes." SARGE looks up at the beacon, who becomes mesmerized by the sight. He slowly approaches the structure with his guard down as STEVB keeps poking the dead Geth, unaware of SARGE's action. SARGE levitates as SHEPARD finally realizes SARGE's actions. He quickly chooses a new option "OH SHIT" and takes a few steps towards SARGE before a bright flash of light fades out the scene.
FADE OUT:
FADE IN:
THE MESSAGE MONTAGE
A brief close-up of SARGE's shocked face (mouth-open, eyes wide open, etc) is followed by a series of clips, depicting the massacre of Jedi by STORMTROOPERS, referencing Revenge of the Sith. A final set of clips shows DARTH SIDIOUS laughing as the shot zooms out to reveal SAREN as his apprentice along with a Reaper fleet, which the two are apparently in the leading Reaper.
CUT OUT:
[ONE SPEECH & DIPLOMACY LATER]
CUT IN:
ELEVATOR RIDE
SHEPARD stands in the middle of SARGE and STEVE in an upwards-bound elevator. SHEPARD looks towards the viewer, while STEVE looks up with an undeterred smile and SARGE looks around, obviously bored, and scratches on occasions. After awhile, SARGE looks at SHEPARD.
SARGE
How long does this ride take? Isn't there like some hi-tech way of skipping this?
SHEPARD's dialogue tree pops up, with the only option of "No" on the right, which he selects. A blue text then pops up on the bottom saying "Shepard: No."
SARGE
Goddamn it.
CUT OUT:
CUT IN:
AFTER-COUNCIL MEETING
SARGE, STEVE, SHEPARD, ANDERSON, and UDINA all stand at the steps leading to the Council platform. SARGE is now wearing N7 on his armor and is in a Captain Morgan stance. ANDERSON and UDINA talk about his responsibilities now that SARGE is a Spectre, despite the fact that SARGE is oblivious to what they're saying. STEVE is poking a KEEPER with awe..
ANDERSON
I'm not sure how you did it, but you've managed to provide evidence that SAREN has gone rogue and proved yourself worthy in the eyes of the Council.
Cuts to a brief scene revealing that SHEPARD was in fact responsible for obtaining the evidence. In the brief montage, SHEPARD and GARRUS kill two mercs in a clinic Robo-cop style, SHEPARD receives a headbutt to the crotch by WREX at C-Sec, SHEPARD receives the omni-tool data from TALI, and SHEPARD is in Chora's Den admiring an Asari table dancer.
UDINA
Whatever method he used to do it, it worked. Humanity is one step closer to claiming its rightful spot in the Council and equality throughout the galaxy.
ANDERSON
Nonetheless, you're a symbol of humanity at its finest SARGE. You'll be surprised at the nice little reward UDINA has given you.
SARGE reacts to ANDERSON's last sentence. He stands normally.
SARGE
Do I get my own dialogue tree?
UDINA
What?
SARGE
I've been having a hard time lately coming up with witty remarks. STEVE of all people has been 1up-ing me. I mean, hear this.(airquotes) " I'm tired of your disingenuous assertions!"
UDINA
Actually---
SARGE
I can't even pick up women anymore! Not even those easy blue alien chicks. That crippled guy gets blue on him like the front row of a Blue Man Group concert.
ANDERSON
You mean Flight Lieutenant Moreau?
SARGE
No, I meant Jake Sully.
SARGE, UDINA, and ANDERSON stare blankly at each other for a brief moment of awkward silence.
UDINA
You're the new Commanding Officer of the SSV Normandy.
SARGE shakes with the excitement of a little schoolgirl, going as far as acting like one. SHEPARD facepalms, and STEVE stops poking the KEEPER and starts clapping and giving a thumbs up. While STEVE gives his thumbs up, the KEEPER viciously attacks the off-guard STEVE. STEVE is helpless as he is pummeled by the KEEPER.
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CUT IN:
SSV NORMANDY EAVESDROPPING
JOKER (Flight Lieutenant Moreau) is watching the previous clip from the cockpit. He shakes his head.
JOKER
This is gonna be one hell of a trip.
END OF EPISODE I